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ton321
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Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

Robert Graves
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ton321 wrote: ↑
Tue Sep 24, 2024 2:30 am
 eyes wide we leapt
into the city
the three of us
Perhaps you need some signifier for fear Tony? I think the theme has resonance.
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Perhaps you're right. Cheers Mac.
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

Robert Graves
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