Poetry Forum

Call down your hounds of hell
Draw up your wooden bridge
Refill your polluted moat
Amass your armies of the night
Tonight we’re gonna march on you
Tonight we finally get to fight

We may be sick, we may be weak
We may be young, we may be small
We have dark magic on our side
The wizard’s wicca will

So shore your fortress up
Rebuild your crumbling walls
Guard your rusting iron gates
Display your show of might
Tonight we’re gonna march on you
Tonight we finally get to fight

Words spoken take us to the brink
Deeds cause spilling of the blood
Flash of temper - call to arms
No holding back the flood


Written in response to a bully in my grade 12 class who was scared shitless by the victims (grade 9) sending poems about wizardry. Sweet!

I love the idea behind this - I'd also like to know what happened next in the bullying episode.

I really don't like to comment on songs without knowing what they sound like, but having read what's on offer in this section, I might change my attitude. There really are some good lyrics that would stand alone, without leaning on staves.
Just one suggestion here -

'We have dark magic on our side
The wizard’s wicker will'

I think you should use 'wicca' -

'We have dark magic on our side
The wizard’s wicca will'

Good one

Barrie

Gidday

Thanks Barrie. Have changed it - also a couple of other words which work better.

I recorded it at home yesterday. I have put a kind of marching gravelly bass underneath it and have some spooky harmonies happening around it. Not sure who it sounds like but it is definely rock.

The incident with the bully happened a few months ago and I haven't heard anymore about it. I did read one of the poems sent to her but didn't have the presence of mind to copy it. I will ask her tomorrow if she comes to school.

Cheers
Dave

Yes, post it - It'll make an interesting follow up.

Barrie

Bullying is a very strong intamate subject and i think that you have handled it very well.

Dave

Like the structure of this, and the attitude! Any chance of an mp3 of your recording? Wonder if you could put them on the audio feature.

Nice one

Mick

Gidday

The version I just recorded has 4 tracks - voice/harmony/guitar/bass plus a long section for the lead guitar to come in and weave his magic. Drums will happen on the weekend. My fiddler mate could perhaps add a lot of magic to it too but his wife just finished reproducing and he has his hands full. All said, I shall see what I can do. It won't be as professional as "Boy in the rusted cage". Give me a week and then if anybody wants the alpha version I will send it.

Cheers
Dave

Gidday all

I have retted through the files of both the people involved in the incident. Mysteriously, the poem has disappeared. Six copies were made and none put in either file. People remember the incident and yet noone wants to take responsability for losing it. The original is with the six copies. Neither student has a copy and the file that it was printed from expunged. It's the inquisition all over again. Sorry. I would have loved to have shared it with the world (and both students gave me permission should I get my hands on it.

Cheers
Dave

Gidday

Apparently there is not enough bandwidth to put these on the audio feature but we are working towards an alternative. If it was totally left up to me it would never get done so I would be happy if anyone has a quick and dirty solution. Maybe something like Myspace.

If anyone is inclined to have a listen to this song, I have put down drums, bass, guitar and vocals for this. There is nothing brilliant about it and my band hasn't even heard it yet so no really hot guitars, proper bass keyboards, fiddle or sax. Imagination has to be used to realise the potential of this piece. It also has space for a guitar solo - I suggest using that for some air guitar practice.

Cheers
Dave

Gidday

I guess I'm having a conversation with myself here, but just in case anybody does happen upon it, I was presented with the poem today - yup! It turned up.

An untitled poem by Uranus' satellite* (no edits for punctuation or spelling - OK!)

I sit here in the shadows and
listen to you talk I hold my
breath my fingers cross…
thank god it isn’t me.
But sitting in the shadows
I’ve decided now
<Student> you mark my words
I will have my ‘vengeance.

You are sitting high and
might, time someone brought
you down.
Read my words and
understand, we will bring you
down.
Alone we fall but now, your
victims unite for common
cause.
Now we fight against you the
victims of your bullying.

* student's name who wrote it

The school counselor gave me this poem today. I'm sure it is the one I read, it was certainly about the girl who was bullying. It was on a crumpled piece of A4 paper and should have been in someone’s file, but he doesn’t want it back. (Strange!) When I first read it, it was in the hands of the girl bullying and she was really freaked out because the person who sent it was really into wicca, although it doesn't actually mention magic in it. The effect was excellent. A practical use for poetry.

Cheers
Dave

Great stuff Dave. I'd have paid to see her face.