Poetry Forum

Another night has passed, and still we are apart.
I miss you.
Are you are thinking of me, wherever you are?
Do you miss me, in your mysterious absence?
Surely you remember the first time our eyes met;
I waited so long to get your attention!
Do not despair, my love, I shall see you again soon.
I will be perched in the willow tree tonight,
just outside your window.
Perhaps, dearest, you will see me as well.

T

I keep not wanting to like this - its simple and could tend to soppy but I am trapped by the sinister undertones and can't wait for Stargazing III.

Small points - absence misspelled and extra "are" in line 3

Elphin

Hi Transparent

Yes - this is working - and I love the sinister undertones.
I'm not overly convinced by "perched" in the willow tree - but it does depend on how the third part plays out.

Creepy!

It’s getting interesting now – when is No3.....

Will the tone get darker ….or are you going to fetch it back ….?..