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sweet
mossy
seagull harping
wind flapping neighbor's plastic
taste the fog
mmmmm

And?

Nice action packed little snapshot, does it for me

Adios Amigo

Danté

Reminds me of a Japanese taste-the-moment poem that I've spent the last few hours searching for, without success - that had a mmmm in it, or some other sound with similar meaning.
wind flapping neighbor's plastic - I like the contrast here.

nice one

Barrie

I must say it's not really to my taste, it just seems like an odd arrangement of words that is purely descriptive. Maybe i'm totally underestimating the style here, but it doesnt 'pop' for me. I'm not getting anything other than the obvious, so not my cup of tea really i'm afraid.

I'm a stanza kind of person unfortunately

mmmmm, fresh mood, cute. wind flapping neighbor's plastic added some sense of modernity to it .

These days I only sing la-la-la.

Nice images.