Mozart gives me company

[arunansu]

Shadows
shelter my thoughts,
vow to love you even more.
Rain plays out golden symphonies -
rattles the beggar’s bowl.

[The Poetry Form : Pensee
Syllable count 2-4-7-8-6.]

[jms]

No familiarity with the form you used at all, but it didn't matter, because this is very good. I liked the allusions to Mozart, which I got despite being a bit of a philistine when it comes to such matters. I'm still not quite sure of the significance of the third line, but it didn't unduly bother me. In fact, it kept me coming back to read a second, and third time.

Cheers,

Jon

[zkhestanova]

Hello Arunansu...

Only a pedanticle: the subject and verbs don't agree:

*pops the cap*

(i) Shadows --> shelter/vow...
(ii) Shadow --> shelters/vows

*puts her blue-pencil away*

zalina, x

[arunansu]

Thank you JMS. Thank you Zalina for pointing to the mistake. I have edited.
Smiles.

[TDF]

being a fan of Wolfgang drew me to this...

I like what you are doing, and byandlarge, how you have done it. It's concise and easy/pleasent to read, but I'm not sure I totally get the meaning if truth be told.

Are the shadows vowing or is the poet vowing to someone else?

[Dalena]

Arunasu

I enjoyed this poem. I am also not completely certain of all it contains; so will keep reading as I seem to find more each time.

Thank you

Dalena