At 50

[Suzanne]

He said,
"I am so very weary.
I am so very cold.
I am afraid we're getting
so very quickly, old."

She said,
"I am so very human,
You needn't be so shy.
I am so very tired
of wondering- what if? and why?

So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not so old."

[David]

Wahey! Well said, suzanne. You show 'em.

Cheers

David Aged 50¾

[Merlin]

Very enjoyable and loads of fun you naughty girl

[mesmie]

lol


how very naughty suzanne but oo how lovely too....

[sundays50]

haha very nice
i dig the way the rhythm changes towards the end
don't forget the end quotation mark!

[Mickpjb]

Suzanne,

Do these lines work for someone who is 42??

Loved it!

Mick

[R. Broath]

I love the line break in her reply
'I'm so very tired
of wondering -'
It's clever and puts a surprising, and optimistic, slant on her outlook.
All those 'comes' in the final stanza - well!
A super write, Suzanne.

Jimmy

[Suzanne]

My husband is turning 50 next week. This pivotal turn in the road has been an underlying theme in most conversations this year.
I had titled it something else, don't even remember what?, but when I put it up, "At 50" seemed to sum it up.

I intend to grow old gracefully, and you can't do that, without having some naughty fun.

The response to this poem has been a great surprise. Thank you for the nice feedback.

Suzanne (I am 47 3/4)

[Danté]

Greatly enjoyed Susanne,

Nice to see your diversity coming over in varying subjects.

Danté 46 and a big bit

[barrie]

All right, children - Barrie, fifty bloody nine and five days and still having fun. Isn't time wonderful?

Leave 'so' out of the last line - the rhythm's better without it and you've already started the verse with it.

So, come to me now weary.
Come to me when you're cold.
Boy, come to me now, quickly,
I'll show you we're not old." - Maybe you make the first and second line echo each other -

Come to me when you're weary,
come to me when you're cold.
Come to me now, quickly!
I'll show you were not old. - Just some senile thoughts.

Barrie

[pitseleh]

brilliant suz

s2, line 2 - i think without the "so" it flows better. up to you

ive got a thing for older women anyways, youve got nothin to worry about

harrison (i had no idea of the ages of yous lot, you all seemed younger.. nice to see such diversity)

[Suzanne]

the "so" s, both of them, bring out a very nice twinkle in my brown eyes when read aloud, you'll have to pull out your imaginations to make it fit into the rhythm. It can work like butter on toast.

Thanks for the suggestions though, it is really fun to get them.

[mesmie]

I like the so's suz they do add for me a little umm something too

perhaps it's a woman thing?...dunno

mes (almost 49)