cozy

[Suzanne]

Once,
when you
had your arm
around me,
and your fingertips

danced

lightly

on my skin-

softly

exploring

the space

between my elbow
and my shoulder...

it was such a comfortable
familiarity.

[Danté]

Suzanne

I had a good chuckle reading this, I somehow read between elbow and arse, but then you know how depraved I am.

Seriously though, it's a lovely peice, and again nice to see, so many here having a play with structure.
No nits from me, you are definitely writing tighter poetry of late, it's a pleasure to see.

Really enjoyed this

Danté

[David]

Agree with Tim. Nicely done, Suzanne. I think it was such a comfortable / familiarity is exactly right.

Cheers

David

[arunansu]

Another gem, Suzanne. No nits from me. Very nicely written.
Cheers.

[jms]

Yes, well done!

[Brendan]

i really did enjoy readign this, the way it is written casues me to fall onto the next word with almost a hurried feeling so i can find what the next word is. I love the fact it is simple, a simple expression of a feeling, even an episode that could be lost in life, but yet demonstrates how important it actually is to the person experiencing the intimacy. Yay!

[PhilipCFJohnson]

Well done! You managed to send a shiver up my spine! In a good kind of tantalising way though!

This poem reads very nicely and works well as a visual piece too!