Sundial

[Danté]

(A Haiku)


Sundial

Light accentuates
contours of her pubic bone;
my shadow finds time.

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[barrie]

I think this is really good.

Barrie

[Mickpjb]

Dante,

So few words but sooooo many images!

Nice one.

Mick

And ditto with being productive of late!

[arunansu]

Mixed the thoughts and images pretty intelligently here.
Bow!

[jms]

Yes, the images contrast / complement each other nicely!

Cheers,

Jon

[Ilex]

This is great, captivating. Ilex.

[Danté]

Barrie,

I am really chuffed that you have shown your appreciation of this poem.
It was well thought over regading the wording, I am glad it was worth the effort.

Thanks Mick, glad you enjoyed and thanks for the reply.

Aru, Haiku is not my usual form, but I´ve enjoyed so many of your short forms I decided to have a go with short forms to help tighten my writing, glad this worked.

Jon,

Thanks, I appreciate your reading and taking time to reply.

Ilex

Thank you, hope to read some more of your about the place,

Many thanks

Tim

[Lake]

I especially like the last line "my shadow finds time", which echoes the title well, though the traditional haiku usually doesn't have a title.

Really good.

Lake

[Danté]

Thanks Lake,

and thanks for the info re titles, I will have to bear that in mind.

All the best

Tim

[El Wow!]

super read spot on

El