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My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Wed Nov 26, 2008 9:30 am
by jms
Through the hole in my sock
I wiggled my toe
up, around, and left, and down.
Through the hole in my sock
my nail, it grew
a mysterious, wiggly thing.
With my nail, through the hole
I scratched my name
on the polished kitchen floor.
With my nail, through the hole
I scratched my nose -
it's not as hard as you'd think.
With my nail, through the hole
in my sock and shoe,
the TV - I switched on and off.
Until one night, fed up
of all this fuss,
my brother - he cut it right off.
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Wed Nov 26, 2008 6:08 pm
by Lake
Jon,
What a fun read! The first stanza has already made me laugh, it's so vivid and true.
I can see how 'I' use my toe to do this and that, but this one
With my nail, through the hole
I scratched my nose -
it's not as hard as you'd think.
needs quite some flexibility, yes, a baby or a little one can do it easily.
How delighted,
Lake
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Thu Nov 27, 2008 8:27 am
by jms
Thanks Lake - glad you enjoyed it!
Cheers,
Jon
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Thu Nov 27, 2008 6:03 pm
by David
I'm afraid this brought back nightmarish memories of My Ding-A-Ling for me, Jon. Don't do that to me!
Cheers
David
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Thu Nov 27, 2008 9:09 pm
by Danté
Jon
I was very curious to see what lay beneath the title, and have to say I enjoyed the musing of something that I would never have dreamed about writing. Fair dues, you pick a subject that is fun, and bring some good elements into the poem.
A good light read
many thanks
Tim
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 6:57 am
by Suzanne
Jon! Oh this made me chuckle.... well, because I admit, as a teenager, I was "caught" playing with my dad's new turn table with my toes! I was flipping the switch, off-on-off-on... and broke it. The cost of repairing it was not appreciated by my dad. Not to mention the embarrassement.
Very enjoyable... and the ending! I could picture a good sibling wrestle.
Thanks,
Suzanne
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 8:25 am
by jms
Thanks all!
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 6:22 pm
by LaMOi
This reminds me of something micheal rosen might write..
I wasnt convinced by this, apart from the last verse, i liked that.
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Sun Nov 30, 2008 2:45 pm
by dedalus
Yess!! My kind of poem. More, please ... emm, fingers, elbows, knees?
Brendan
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 9:03 am
by jms
Brendan - I'll see what I can manage!
LaMOi - Not convincing? This kind of thing happens to me everyday!
Cheers,
Jon
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 1:21 pm
by pitseleh
nice one, really good, fun read.
cheers
harrison
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 1:37 pm
by jms
Thanks!
Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:39 pm
by PhilipCFJohnson
A very clever choice of title. It certainly will guarantee that everyone who sees it will read the poem. I have to confess I was glad to find it wasn't what I first assumed. *cough cough* Good job.
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Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Mon Dec 01, 2008 10:28 pm
by writedis
He he Brothers suck!
I always get holes in my socks and Im glad I've seen a poem about it. I liked it because it made me feel like I wanted to read it all to see what happens. Good length as well.
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Re: My Wiggly Thing
Posted: Tue Dec 02, 2008 8:52 am
by jms
Thanks, both!