A slight loss

[Danté]

A slight loss

Playing a few hot licks
on a dusty black Stratocaster
takes me right back
to the glowing valves
and overdriven distortion.

Girls danced like loons
high on red Lebanese draw
and talked nonsense
in-between, yea maaan
and the odd hysterical fit.

Sparkling balls in halls
where we played the songs
of rock-gods, seemed
to instil ethereal visions
upon their consciousnesses.

Even during these times
older boys or “young men”
as we preferred to be
known, would act cool
until the head-banging tunes.

My hand glides across
metal frets where harmonics
bounce off the strings
and I can still hear them,
when the volume is turned up.

.

[Suzanne]

Tim,

You have written two things this week that speak to me deeply. ... (and Mesmie just did, too. What perfect company I am in!)

This was such a great grab of the moment. Wow. wow,
I could almost smell the air in the place. It makes me want to go out and find a live band to watch tonight. Maybe, I 'll take out the woodstock files.


to the glowing valves
and overdriven distortion- I loved this line and can hear it in my head. Let them glow, a little distortion adds to the charm.

and talked nonsense
in-between, yea maaan- what? girls talking nonsense? I don't understand this line, lol.

of rock-gods, seemed
to instil ethereal visions
upon their consciousnesses. I would change the "their" to "our" , my opinion.

when the volume is turned up.--- wonderful last line. Really good closure.


I loved this and will be listening to a little of Jimmy tonight,

Great write, good memories,
Suzanne

[arunansu]

This rocks, m-a-a-a-a-n! Yeah, this reminds of Jimmy Hendrix!

[karalma]

A great poem that reminds us of lost youth. Each time I read it I wanted to add high to the end of the last line - not sure why.
thanks

[Leigh]

Rock and Roll hey. It's good game and no-one should stay away from it until they are dead; even then the dead should dance. Destroy the enemies of Rock.... for a laugh.

[Danté]

Thanks all, for the replies, greatly appreciated.
Suzanne, I am sticking with "their" as it´s the audience I am concerned with, but thanks for the thought.

Many thanks

Danté