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No romantic moment to lay dying, no poigniant last lament

It's just a car to crush you, and I wouldn't even know

Hi Leigh

I liked this as I thought it flowed well. However the flow seemed to stop with the last words. I thought something like "you didn't even know" flowed better but maybe the idea was to stop the flow??

Hi Leigh.
This was thought provoking. It has a lot of emotion in it, such resignation.
and it is a bit scary, like life is.
Suzanne