13/101 (explicit)

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thoke
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Mon Feb 16, 2009 2:42 pm

13/101*

Kick a squirrel!
You have to do it,
lest your brainbox
systems output
be lost to a game
of Halo 3.

Fuck a monk!
Go right ahead and do it.
Were it not for the Jesus milk
fed to every Albion chile,
everybody would muck a funk
most every day
of their ridiculous lives.

Keck a khaki coo,
brothers, sisters, do it well!
Dress yourself in camelflage
and ride it out of hell.

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*See '1/101': viewtopic.php?f=20&t=8708

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Tue Feb 17, 2009 8:52 pm

the meaning of this seems instructive and anarchistic (can't find sp check on here!)
and although it seems to shock the parrallel it presents in the following line make you stop and think.

hey its ok to do these things because they are morally legitamised by commercial,religous and war practice.

the Bit about jesus milk and albion is good the reversal of muck and funk works as i'm thinking druids?

its different and i come away from it with something different and thought provoking

yours tramontane
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Sat Feb 21, 2009 11:55 pm

I think if Victor Mancini wrote a poem - it would go a little something like this .. . .
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