Rose Room

[Lovely]

What be inspiration,
these thoughts within us reared
Yet thoughts in feelings for silences
to sudden are appeared.

Masters speak their few words
disciples gather near,
none was written down for all
most passed through mouth and spear!


Silence the light,
buttercups more deep and bright,
thoughts rule these realms---
they arrive and just they well!


Inspiration, these two roads,
good and evil, God will know.
One will move the other makes
love beholds--the other rakes.

God is silent in his read
All seeing he has been,
who yearns for Nature's boons
should attune to her melodic tunes.


Our thoughts silent and cruel....
deep lives within us all,
manifest what we feel---
our emotions make us spill;

Light moves my soul
none know light, her goal,
light, life, this love is one------
we (move) by running to a sun!

Attune we to proper tunes
we find inspiration gathers wounds
like owls on wings---
we move to silent things.

Our thoughts are substance
they yearn for wings;
stuff your merry goat---
this skinny pig won't sing.





What is moved which matters most
is good or bad or holy ghost
and when all seems sad
one-thousand-suns speak the most!






What (moves) matter is thought
the passions and knives,
we spin because we miss
we severe because we tie.




Things are moved by hidden forces
atoms spin along their courses,
no such thing as chance
the merry dogs of war must dance!

What we feel we long to have
when we kneel that's not as bad,
yet these emotions when removed
----there be the Only One and true.

[Lovely]

Sorry for the epic tale. Take it or leave I will understand. Just wanted to give you all
something of my love to you all. I have done some edits here as time does not permit me
anymore......but it is with lots of love anyway. U may find it
argumental or even touching ...ussss...andss..sssem. and---ummmm.
Who by fire...eh?

DJL

[arunansu]

Hmmmm... for an impatient person as me - this IS a test. But it TASTES good, needless to say. Loved this part :

"Things are moved by hidden forces
atoms spin along their courses,
no such thing as chance---
the merry dogs of war will dance!"

Thanks.

[David]

I must admit, I didn't read the whole thing. I skimmed it.

It's a very strange thing, L, but your diction and your metre is sometimes - sometimes, I said - really quite reminiscent of Emily Dickinson. Are you a fan of the Amherst Spinster?

Cheers

David

[Danté]

Lovely

I found this a very pleasant read, there are a few areas of the content which are at odds with my
own perceptions, but I do read everything with an open mind and can honestly say I enjoyed
the time I spent reading it. I like metrical poetry, and the varying meter in this suits the lines
pretty well. I'm not going to crit this as I get the feeling you have it how you want it and I am
perfectly happy to read on that strength.

thanks for an enjoyable read

Danté

[backinblack]

Hi there, You know I like this type of writes so no surprise I enjoyed it.
You usual visuals and a well structured write.

Keep doing it.

Best wishes

B.

[swoosh]

hello lovely,

really enjoyed your thoughts of perception. nice read

[Lovely]

Thanks to all. Glad everyone took something from it I hope it lifted your day a little bit.

Roses are red my love,


DJL

[LaMOi]

i think edited it could suit my own pleasure for short ans snappy... I thought that some of the rhyme seemed a bit random, the imagery i mean seemed there just for the sake of rhyme?? i do like 'Thoughts .. yearn for wings' - nice

Enjoyable read nonetheless.