Scraggy Tree

[jazziwoz]

Scraggy tree
Old man of the earth
Long forgotten, times of blossom
Brittle boned
Creaking with the aches and pains
Of arthritic joints
Spindly branches that reach like walking sticks
Seeking a path
To amble slowly
Through another spring
Basking in the warmth of the summer
Dreading the winds the autumn might bring
And the cold dank winter nights
Chill him with to the bone
Sometimes
He feels so alone…
Old man of the earth.

[Lovely]

Something very hearty and warm about this. Enjoyed it.

The four seasons in all things. Now I've mentioned "four" before and it meaning ten?


I liked the concepts here and its expansion and growth to its eventual meaning and demise.
"creaking with the ackes and pains" later "seeking a path" to "another spring".

There's lots of good images to reflect on.

Thanks,

DJL

[swoosh]

Hey,

Nice personification of a tree here. You had some nice ryhmes and overall i think it is a solid piece. nothing too complicated here and the
images it brought to me were vivid.

good read

S

[backinblack]

A much enjoyed write.
I got some vivid images from this and on a great topic also.
I'm into nature poems so this was a treat.
nice write.

B.

[David]

Good stuff, jazzy. It's possibly a little clichéd in the second half, but it finishes strongly and it's got a good solitary woody vibe. I think the first half is excellent.

Nice work.

Cheers

David

[Suzanne]

This was a nice poem. I work with a woman who resembles your tree! I enjoy the beginning and ending rounding each other out. The simplicity works well for me. Good work, Jazziwoz.

Suzanne

[nar]

Hey, Jazzi.

ooo - this all very Ent aint it? A good thing, IMHO.

The last line rounds things off pretty well.

I'm with David on a couple of the lines before it being a little old, but maybe old trees are allowed old lines .

Using "Old man of the earth" at the start and the end is nice. I might have been tempted to make it the first (rather than 2nd) and last line.

A nice endearing old fellow. I hope he finds an Entwife soon.

Cheers,

- Neil.