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Monsoon

A splash, albeit an expected one,
turquoise and amber rippling outwards.
Seraph, wears dark and light shades
while clothes are getting torn for
a few quiet men, all gifted but despised.

Divinity, completely undressed
ruefully deploys her full frontal form
to pacify an eager, angry mob.
Once! They labelled her as a cradling slut!
She whimpers until her innermost
folds, are lapped by hungry tongues.

A shudder of her twitching form
to rally a chant from the gifted, quiet few,
slung in a twisted heap by the open door
like a pair of wet stockings
that clung to the curves of her legs.


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I enjoyed this one again,you seem to have a habit of writing great poetry.
another vision filled write, also pretty deep in my view.
Great stuff between the lines also.
Great write.


B.

Tim,

Wow, this was a powerful thing. The images are so strong, I admire your ability to show such vivid color with so few words. Wow, again. It certainly isn't a comforting piece to read, quite unsettling, uncomfortable.
Having some experience with institutions filled with men like you described, I could relate to an underlying frustration.

Very interesting material. I love the curve of her legs with wet stockings. Great read. Thanks.

The audio is such a rich addition! I loved that!
Suzanne

Powerful write Dante, I loved your recitation once again. Interesting title. I'm hearing this repeatedly to get the inner meaning. Captivating stuff.

Dante, it is the first verse it is so beautiful, I shake to the next.


A very deep write this. Loved it loads.

DJL

Hi, Tim.

I can't add much to what the others have said. This is really very good. Your delivery on the audio adds much to the overall feel, and helps solidify the words.

Cheers,

- Neil.

Hi,

Really good poem, the imagery i saw was great.

Thanks,
Stevj016.

Dante loved this much a brilliant write honest.

Pow. You!

DJL

Tim

A splendid write sir...together with your audio it paints an extremely vital pciture..loved it!

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