Stagnant Pond

[jazziwoz]

Overgrown,
A torrid tangle
Of weeds…..
And green glutinous algae provide shelter
For mosquito larvae, pond skaters and water boatmen
Ripples distort reflection like smears of grease on glass
Calm and serene the water stagnates through life.

[swoosh]

Hey jazz,
this one painted a clear pic in my mind. liked ''torrid tangle of weeds'',
and ''smears of grease on glass''.
nice one
enjoyed

S

[Suzanne]

Jazz,
I like the word "the" in this line.
"Calm and serene the water stagnates through life."

Very nice poem, vivid images. I enjoyed it.
Suzanne

[Lake]

Hi jazz,
It's like an imagery poem and I liked the line "Ripples distort reflection like smears of grease on glass", too. I'm not sure if "Stagnant" goes well with "calm and serene" for I thought "stagnant" means motionless, lifeless and stale. Is it not?

Thanks for the read.

Lake

[arunansu]

Nice capture, Jazziwoz. Liked your choice of words.

[Lovely]

Would it be 'the water stagnates (with) life'? it gives more meaning to last line. Midnight skaters better its when mosquitos wake, but then,
it might be cliche to a known poem which had fair reviews in past glories.

It's a good observation of a stagnant pond becoming. Thought you could go deeper with this subject matter because it was interesting.

Well worth the read and thanks.



DJL

[backinblack]

Hi, you capture this well, your ripples metaphor was great.
I have a pond like this just by my house, minus that mossy larvae! thankfully.
after my first read of this I went for a look, must have done something right eh?
this was a vivid reflection of a stagnant pond, nice.


Enjoyed


BinB.