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jisbell00
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Tue Mar 12, 2024 5:26 am

Hi Phil,

A silent response - I like it! It's quite moving, actually, as a response to that particular poem. I assume it's someone you know? The sitter looks at ease being painted.

Can I ask: is the edited poem improved in your estimation?

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John
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Tue Mar 12, 2024 6:07 am

Just playing with visual analogy John.
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Tue Mar 12, 2024 6:15 am

It is an unsettling picture, at least in context, and would go well alongside the text.

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Tue Mar 12, 2024 11:40 am

Perhaps because the eyes are askew, the face is a little frightening, as if the person were possibly crazy. However, the mottled color of the skin imbues the face with character. It's certainly a well worn face. If you had lowered the higher of the two eyes (the right eye? the left eye? -- what do we call it when we are facing someone like that?), the face would look less forbidding. I notice that they eyes are wide open, and that the irises have a muddy quality (despite the strong blue color). That gash of a mouth is very interesting, and expressive of some kind of resignation.
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Tue Mar 12, 2024 3:34 pm

Thanks John and Caleb. Always interested in elements of disconnect and separation (the 'windowless walls' !)

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