Goal!

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rushme
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Fri Jun 11, 2010 8:38 am

Alignment
of stars & feet
in the right angle.
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Fri Jun 11, 2010 10:24 am

Very good, rushme. I think you've got it.

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Fri Jun 11, 2010 11:26 am

Yeah, but do you know the offside law?
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
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Sat Jun 12, 2010 9:01 pm

Rushme,

I think you'll find it's GOOOOOOAAAALLLL!!!!!!
Instead of just sitting on the fence - why not stand in the middle of the road?
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Sun Jun 13, 2010 12:20 am

ray miller wrote:Yeah, but do you know the offside law?
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 5:20 am

thanks david!

ray - i only know that unless that ball is kicked inside the net it is not a goal - & to get it inside the angle must be right - no matter where you're standing - & the stars of course must be in your favor - otherwise no matter how hard you try or how much you sweat - it might not happen. so perhaps luck & pesperation both!

but yes at times even when the ball enters the goal - it is not a goal - so perhaps those other rules come into play - the technical ones - offside? or whatever. must read about it! why is it not a goal even when the ball is inside the goal?
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 6:27 am

rushme wrote:the stars of course must be in your favor - otherwise no matter how hard you try or how much you sweat - it might not happen.
Huh? I don't follow . . .
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 6:59 am

which part?
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 7:05 am

stars? as in players?
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 8:21 am

the stars in your favor - as in luck, good fortune, fate, destiny...

but i see it can work both ways - yea why not the stars as players...?

was also looking at the larger picture.
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Mon Jun 14, 2010 1:53 pm

I see . . . personally, I am inclined to think that concepts such as fate, destiny (along with astrology, spirituality and religion) present us with a significantly reduced picture of the world and the universe . . . ah well, whatever gets you through the night I suppose . . .

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Tue Jun 15, 2010 5:52 am

my dear brian - by larger picture i did not mean - fate destiny along with astrology, spirituality and religion

i meant - goal - the various goals in life we pursue & as in the game of football - the importance of feet - that take us in & out of the doors of opportunity - if pointed in the right angle.

as for all the above - i do not believe in astrology or religion - but spirituality yes & at times fate (from personal experience) but of course to each his / her own.

but thanks for pointing the stars as players - quite pleased with the multi-angled piece!
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