God is a Teabag By Which We Measure Our Pain (94/101*)

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thoke
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Tue Dec 23, 2014 6:14 pm

A big BANG
In a tea cup, the muslin bag’s
S p i d e r y
V i b r a t i o n s
D a r k ,
The d o t
From whence come
S c r i b b l e s
Of the u n s w a l l o w e d w o r l d.

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[Tea speaks for itself. Tea just is.]
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Tue Dec 23, 2014 6:30 pm

Enjoyed your poem Ben. Not sure if leafy would offer a better thread than unswallowed or teapot/brew could be in there too :)

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Tue Dec 30, 2014 8:14 am

Thought the quitessential Englishness of the title ie reference to a cuppa was playful homage to the quintessential Englishness of the source material ie John Lennon.
I walked past a public house which was full of uncouth men laughing and backslapping...God, how I envied them. None of them gave a toss about the future of English poetry. A.Mole
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Wed Dec 31, 2014 9:05 am

Brilliant metaphor, really enjoyed that.
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