I like everything I like about you, like

[Mic]

your feet
that you like orangutans
your hand in mine
my feet in yours
I like how you sing in your sleep
your sideways looks
your sideways jokes
I like you sideways
how your shoulders shake
how often you laugh
I like how you put on your socks
I like how long you take to think things through
how you feel your way in conversation
I like that you will say it
I like how tall you are
how tall I am with you
I like you curled up
the grey in your hair
your hair’s willpower
I like how lavender-like you are
I like behind your knees
I like how you let go
what I don’t know about you yet
what I’ll never know




Original

I like your feet
I like that you like orang-utans
I like your hand in mine
I like my feet in yours
I like how you sing in your sleep
I like your sideways looks
I like your sideways jokes
I like you sideways
I like how your shoulders shake
I like how often you laugh
I like how often you make me laugh
I like how you put your socks on
I like how long you take to think things through
I like how you feel your way in conversation
I like that you will say it
I like how tall you are
I like how tall I am with you
I like you curled up
I like the grey in your hair
I like your hair’s willpower
I like how lavender-like you are
I like behind your knees
I like how you let go
I like what I don’t know about you yet
I like what I’ll never know

[Marc]

And I like this poem Mic


Marc

[David]

And I like this poem Mic

Me too. I like a good list poem. (My Cat Jeoffrey's one of the best, but I digress.)

Nice one, Mic.

[xanadu]

Really like this. No hidden meanings or subtleties, tells it like it is. This comes from the heart and the style suits the content so well.

[1lankest]

Yep, I'm with the consensus, Mic. I thought I'd hate it, as I do most list poems, but loved it instead, especially the sideways section. Well done!

[Arian]

Yes, very good. An accumulating sense of fondness that ends up feeling like - well, love, I suppose.

I like how you sing in your sleep

yes, it must be love. No other condition could account for a liking like that.

Good stuff.

peter

[Elphin]

I thought exactly what Peter said. I like that you chose the word like rather than love, so much more powerful and cumulatively it feels like love.

Well done

elph

[Mic]

Yaay!

Thanks everyone

[Richard]

This is nice, but list poems need to have quite a kick of surprise in them somewhere, and I'm not seeing that here I am afraid. Sorry Mic!

[camus]

Reminds me of another poem.

And as with the other poem that I'm reminded of, you include a subtle kinda twisty ending:

"what I don’t know about you yet
what I’ll never know"

or

"To you
To all the ones who got away
Touché"

Good stuff, I may derive my own version!

[Macavity]

hi Mic,
I didn't like this when I read the poem last week-end. And re-reading it is clicking - how shallow a reader am I?

Perhaps my initial hurdle was putting the visceral joy of Cumming's poem out of mind:

http://writersalmanac.publicradio.org/i ... 2009/10/14

all the best

mac

[Mic]

This is nice, but list poems need to have quite a kick of surprise in them somewhere, and I'm not seeing that here I am afraid. Sorry Mic!

Thanks Richard - and no apologies needed.

Reminds me of another poem.

And as with the other poem that I'm reminded of, you include a subtle kinda twisty ending:

"what I don’t know about you yet
what I’ll never know"

or

"To you
To all the ones who got away
Touché"

Good stuff, I may derive my own version!

Nice that you remembered an old'n. & go on, do a 'like' poem like mine!

hi Mic,
I didn't like this when I read the poem last week-end. And re-reading it is clicking - how shallow a reader am I?

Perhaps my initial hurdle was putting the visceral joy of Cumming's poem out of mind:

http://writersalmanac.publicradio.org/i ... 2009/10/14

all the best

mac

Thanks Mac. That ee cummings poem is lovely! (I'm an ee cummings fan, but haven't come across that one before)

Mic

[ray miller]

I like
my feet in yours

your sideways looks
your sideways jokes
I like you sideways

I didn't like

your hair’s willpower
I like how lavender-like you are

All in all though, I like it.