Sock Cantrip

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Sun Aug 09, 2015 4:44 pm

Stink-toe, fluff hoard,
stone insider,
unravel rag, slip low,

partner roanoking,
perfunctory condom
of the soles of souls,

free me into the grip
of the great god
Summersandalus.
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Mon Aug 10, 2015 10:11 am

Alongside Stink-toe, fluff hoard, perfunctory condom et al, I'm not sure I want to know what partner roanoking is. And slip low is something of a mystery too. What's afoot, Mr Crook?

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Wed Aug 12, 2015 5:31 pm

Dear John
what partner roanoking is
It is universally noted that one in a pair of socks tend to disappear.
And....https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Roanoke_Colony

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Wed Aug 12, 2015 6:30 pm

Much enjoyed! Though I don't think I've ever had stones get inside my socks.

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Fri Aug 14, 2015 2:03 pm

Ta, Ros
I don't think I've ever had stones get inside my socks
Sheffield is truly a Utopia.

It may be that I quote often take my socks off when walking on the beach and so...

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Fri Aug 14, 2015 5:38 pm

Ha!

Liked this Seth. It put a smile on my face and kept it there.
The things we can write about. People are always asking for
something new; you've achieved this in spades.
Loved 'summersandalus'.

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Sat Aug 15, 2015 4:35 pm

I had to look up cantrip. I always have to look up cantrip. (I always think it's a verse form, like sestina or something, and am always pleasantly surprised.)

And this is fun. Seems to start in Anglo-Saxon and end with the invocation of some Roman deity. Roanoking is a very nice coinage.

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Mon Aug 17, 2015 5:18 pm

Thanks JJ. :D
Loved 'summersandalus'.
A much neglected deity.

Thanks David
I had to look up cantrip. I always have to look up cantrip.

I am of course following in the footsteps....or flight pattern...of the Magpie. Jane and I were in an anthology recently (Three Drops from a Cauldron) and her contribution was "Market Cantrip". I thought it was time to write one.

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Wed Aug 19, 2015 10:28 pm

Loved this. Summersandalus is great. Still smiling.
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Sat Aug 22, 2015 3:39 pm

Good fun this, Seth, though I fear we might be returning into the arena of the woolen winter warmer. Perhaps the condom reference is distracting, perhaps not. And is a sock perfunctory? Is a condom? As much as I dislike both, I think not.

Perfunctory comments aside, this is great.

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Wed Aug 26, 2015 3:09 pm

Thanks very much, Steve. Glad it made for the smile.

Thanks very much, Luke......nice to see you around.
And is a sock perfunctory?
In the summer, Yes. In the winter...no. :D

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Wed Aug 26, 2015 5:21 pm

Oh, that was a lovely read.

Socks are a favorite theme for me.
Nice and light hearted, Seth.

Thanks,
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