Berry Season
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Bilberries
good,
but not as good as
beerberries
Beerberries
good,
but not as good as
ice cream berries
Ice cream berries
good,
but not as good as
kiss-me berries
good,
but not as good as
beerberries
Beerberries
good,
but not as good as
ice cream berries
Ice cream berries
good,
but not as good as
kiss-me berries
We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
Richard Wilbur
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
Richard Wilbur
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Kiss-me berries
good,
but not as good as
huckleberries.
Is that the general thrust?
enjoyed
JJ
good,
but not as good as
huckleberries.
Is that the general thrust?
enjoyed
JJ
Long time a child and still a child
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JJWilliamson wrote:Kiss-me berries
good,
but not as good as
huckleberries.
Is that the general thrust?
enjoyed
JJ
Huckleberries are things o'beauty
Seth
We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Nobody's gonna wanna kiss you after beer and ice cream. I looked up beerberries, in my stupidity, it's the name of an Irish band. The Pogues they ain't.
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
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Well, I can report that it sometimes works. (Sometimes not). Tends to be pale ale though.ray miller wrote:Nobody's gonna wanna kiss you after beer and ice cream. I looked up beerberries, in my stupidity, it's the name of an Irish band. The Pogues they ain't.
Okay, gonna You Tube this band. I am not a huge fan of the Pogues, so sub-Pogue may be..
Seth
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"bearberries" are wheat berries. Love the folk like refrain with "not as good as". This makes it almost a fertility poem for summer. Enjoyed.
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Thanks, Paul
A substantially different version just came out....
A substantially different version just came out....
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k-j wrote:The extra stanza in the print version makes all the difference - why didn't you include it here, Seth?
Thanks, K-J. Glad to hear so. Because it wasn't written at the time. I had an initial idea fragment and posted here. A few days after I remembered a looming deadline and decided to try and make something...more...of at least part of the initial fragment. A bit of a last-minute-charlie on this one.
Seth
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Print version is more witty.Antcliff wrote:Bilberries
good,
but not as good as
beerberries
Beerberries
good,
but not as good as
ice cream berries
Ice cream berries
good,
but not as good as
kiss-me berries
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Completely agree. I was noncommittal for a few readings, then I read the thread and found the last verse. And the piece went from being so-so in my mind, to outstanding. Really like it. Suddenly, from seeming a bit unanchored, there was a witty, and reflective, resolution.k-j wrote:The extra stanza in the print version makes all the difference
I can understand that, but they had their moments. Recommend their version of Waltzing Matilda. Moving.Antcliff wrote: I am not a huge fan of the Pogues
Good stuff, seth.
Cheers
peter
It's the title in the print version that I like.
Jackie
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Thanks, Paul!
Thanks, Jackie
Nice to hear...yes, it will be the title now.
Thank you, Peter. Very nice to hear this about the re-write. I was lucky in that a later deadline forced me to go back...and write about what the poem was really about in the first place.
Seth
Thanks, Jackie
Nice to hear...yes, it will be the title now.
Thank you, Peter. Very nice to hear this about the re-write. I was lucky in that a later deadline forced me to go back...and write about what the poem was really about in the first place.
I now have. It is, yes. Thanks.Recommend their version of Waltzing Matilda. Moving.
Seth
We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
Richard Wilbur
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
Richard Wilbur