May I

[Jimoonan]

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Running On

If I may; if you don’t object; I will take your inspiration and run; I will make it my own; if you don’t object, that is; if I may



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[Macavity]

Welcome to the forum Jim. Struggling with your write. Seems a mix of politeness/assertion, but in both the outcome is theft, unless passive behaviour is overcome. I do like the use of space waiting to be...perhaps that's it...utilising/occupying space.

hope that helps some

Phil

[bjondon]

Hi Jimoonan,
Enjoyed this, but not exactly sure why. It's monumentally ambiguous in a very English way. A sense of mischief masquerading as coyness, a sense of much energy held in check about to be unfurled.

Best, Jules

[Firebird]

This could be read as a literal intention with a slightly facetious tone. I don’t think the writer is around here anymore. He/she has gone.

Cheers,

Tristan

[camus]

opaque independent clauses.

Like it.

Cheers
Kris

[Leaf]

Hi Jim,

It's good to see you here and I hope you'll be back to post again. Re. this one, it's interesting. I'm not quite sure what's going on, but you've received some insightful feedback and I'd like to see you run with it

Best wishes,
Fliss