My autobiography

[kozmikdave]

..........My autobiography
.............is desIgned to
........induce TALK and
..comment ABOUT the
......cause of MY celebrity.
..I embrace SELFlessness
.....and wish TO point out
.........that if ANYbody can
............find ONE single
......person WHO can dis-
...prove my WILLingness to
be a good LISTENer when
...sensitivity TO others is due,
...........I will MEet them
...........and pay them off.


[Inspired by Arco - had to try this!]

[Arcadian]

not bad at all kozy !

Im glad i inspired you

what shall we call this form though ? - I have come up with the following:

visual poem

two-way poem

embedded poem

schizoid poem

dual poem

and the lists goes on


arco

[Jester]

Nice one Dave. I had a go last night but the clock said I'd better not carry on - damn these early mornings. Think you've done really well with this - quick and a great laugh. Thanks again to Arco too.

Mick

[David]

Excellent.

[vesuvius]

Good stuff!

that if ANYbody can
...find ONE single
person WHO can

Whereas you might usually say "if anyone who can disprove..." you needed to use the "ONE" so that's the only bit that seems a bit forced.

it's only a gimmick though and well done.

[Saul]

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[Yesterday]

simply funny.... i love it!

hehehehe...ahhh.

i have no crisism, but what is the correct name for this style of poetry? does it even have one?

[kozmikdave]

Yesterday

All I can do is refer you to Arcadian's comments further up the thread. I don't know what to call it - I just saw what Arco had done and thought I'd like to try modifying it so that the "subliminal message" was an integral part of the poem. Mad Magazine has had fold-up pages that do the opposite since I was a kid in the sixties, so it is hardly a new idea.

I'm glad you were amused.

Cheers
Dave

[Yesterday]

may i borrow the form for an english journal, it seems like a mesostic type of poetry but with another poem inside. it may not be new to you but i wanst born in the 60's n ive neva actully read one of those poems in a mad magazin, well... ive read hardly any of them so that may explain why. it was great!

[kozmikdave]

Gidday

may i borrow the form for an english journal, it seems like a mesostic type of poetry but with another poem inside. it may not be new to you but i wanst born in the 60's n ive neva actully read one of those poems in a mad magazin, well... ive read hardly any of them so that may explain why. it was great!

Of course you may do anything you like with poem - I'd be flattered. It's all new to me to be writing anything like that as well. I think Mad Magazine still does the fold up at the back. It's usually inside the back cover. There is a picture of some scene with a caption underneath. When you fold the page as instructed, the picture has changed along with the caption. I don't think it would be described as a poem, but it was clever and often political.

For a moment, I thought you had identified the name for this form of poem. I looked it up on Wikipedia

A mesostic is a poem or other text written such that a vertical phrase intersects lines of horizontal text. Similar to an Acrostic, but with the vertical phrase intersecting the middle of the line, as opposed to beginning each new line.

The examples I saw were like acrostics in that only one letter per line was active in spelling out a word or two. We might have to stick with "embedded poems", although I am warming to "subliminal".

[Just looked up acrostics and found one with words rather than single letters and so you are probably correct afterall.]

Cheers
Dave

[Yesterday]

thanx!!! i was looking up differant forms of poetry and i came across mesostic and seemed to be kinde of similar... yours is differant though and i think emmbeded would probably be correct. thanx for letting me use the poems...

[Robert]

Embedded poem? Now that's a good idea. One about the embedded journalists in eye-rack - as the merry cans call it.

I like it Dave but I have astigmatism so the letters in red are doing a barn dance! I changed it to black bold. Also less obtrusive.