The Other Side of Paradise

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Fri May 18, 2007 12:41 pm

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"Let me tell you about the very rich.
They are different from you and me.
They possess and enjoy early,
and it does something to them,
makes them soft, where we are hard,
cynical where we are trustful, in a way that,
unless you were born rich,
it is very difficult to understand."

F. Scott Fitzgerald (1896-1940)


The rich are different from you and me,
Said sad-eyed Fitzgerald, sozzled in Paris,
To which burly Hemingway, the boxer, replied,
Yes, they have more money.
That was the famous put-down,
Quoted over and over again, found
In all the literary gossip sheets,
But self-doubting Fitz had it right.

Daisy Buchanan had a voice full of money,
Tinkling, silvery, cold and careless;
With her shining hair and pouting lips,
She had been born to accept convenience.
Coolly, she witnessed the wreckage of lives,
Other people’s lives, little people’s lives,
And then blithely, gently, drifted away,
Leaving others to clean up behind.

Fitzgerald understood this.
Hemingway never did. He thought
It was all bluster and breaking through,
Being better than you, a two-fisted man
From Big Two-Hearted River.

Fight your first war from an ambulance,
Marry a woman, write short sentences,
Go to bullfights, drink, marry another woman;
Shoot innocent animals in Africa.
Write some more short sentences,
Get drunk, go fishing, get in a couple of
Airplane crashes, go to Cuba, get drunk,
Become a crazy warzone tourist,
Burnish your tough guy reputation,
And then get married some more.
It wasn’t a bad old life. Macho man,
Successful writer, bit of an asshole.
But then it all came down
To that cold bleak day in Idaho
And to the final metallic taste
Of that shotgun on your lips.
Tell me, how did that feel?
No, don’t tell me. I know.

Fitzgerald understood.
In the Great Gatsby you can
See his secret life on display:
Just as Robert Louis Stevenson,
A brother writer before him,
He shows, by design not accident,
His mild Dr Jekyll, Nick Carroway,
Then he carefully uncovers
His half-horrified fascination
With the things that money can do:
I live in this mansion, Old Sport,
Haven’t quite counted the rooms,
All my suits come from Savile Row,
My shirts come from Jermyn Street,
My shoes, of course, are handmade;
I have servants, wine, food in abundance,
The whole place is lit up like Coney Island,
Mr. Nowhere Man from Nowhere.

Everything began to fall in place,
In Gatsby’s dreams, in Fitzgerald’s,
And all for the sake of a brittle romance.
Shattered, splintered, both broke apart.
His first novel, “This Side of Paradise”
Had sealed his fate. His early success
Condemned him: assured, at last, of money,
His Southern belle had married him,
Ooo, let’s go to Paris! cried Zelda,
Where all the advanced people go.
One can imagine how well that went down
Among the embittered postwar French.
Champagne, champagne, toujours champagne!
The dollar then went a long long way
And all the locals (read the books)
Were landladies, waiters and taxi drivers.
Life was grand for Yankee layabouts,
Life was a fuckin jamboree.

It was 1928, says Fitzgerald,
Intermittently, inescapably observant,
That I noticed how soft we'd become.
Some of us were veterans of the War
But all the local boys on this Italian beach
Could have beaten the crap out of us.
Hemingway, of course, would have none of it.
He was still boxing in short sentences.
Hem, I want you to look at my prick.
Scott, tight, not quite drunk, dragged
his uneasy friend into the gurgling toilets.
Zelda says I'm too small, says I'm no good.
You're only small, says Hemingway,
because you are not aroused. Hey tiger!
I'm telling you, Scotty, pay no attention,
She's an emasculating bitch.
You can't say that. She's my wife, godammit!
Ah fuck it, Scott, pull up your trousers.

Seventeen drafts for a novel,
Written again and again and again
Just to get the tone exactly right.
I would say that was serious.
The Saturday Evening Post paid excellent money
For the popular Fitzgerald stories.
He worked hard at his craft, when sober,
Rewriting again and again and again.

Then suddenly he was no longer popular.
He went to Hollywood on a contract
To write screenplays from nine to five
In a breezeblock California building
With other sad less famous scribblers.
He wrote heartfelt letters to his daughter,
Until, finally, the drink did him in,
Or else those bruises in his heart.

He could see them so clearly through the window.
You are warm inside, I am cold outside.
Knock, knock, knock.
The rich are different from you and me.
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Mon May 21, 2007 9:58 pm

Too many good lines to mention. I've read this over and over in an attempt to stride the great divide. Trouble is, I can niether be objective or involved because I know too little of either character and am a raging cynic where personal observation is involved.
Will, however, continue to read because I suspect there's some truth in it, somewhere.

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Wed May 23, 2007 4:13 pm

fascinating writing, particularly the third stanza. very well done
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Thu May 24, 2007 6:28 pm

Ded,

Another educational read.

But as for its poetic value (whatever that means), I'm horribly torn. I really, really want to like this. After the first stanza of yours I thought you were really onto something excellent. S1 is perfect.

S2 and 3 are equally as good.

But after that the voice completely changes. There was a clever, satirical, and lyrical voice to the beginning three stanzas. But the way it descends into an acerbic rant really threw me. While the historical insight and knowledge is well researched and very knowledgable, the accusing tone of the piece resembles more a polemic student newspaper than anything else at points.

Stanza 6 in particular is a good example.

Everything began to fall in place,
In Gatsby’s dreams, in Fitzgerald’s,
And all for the sake of a brittle romance.
Shattered, splintered, both broke apart.
- there's a humanity and understanding in this passage. But then

Ooo, let’s go to Paris! cried Zelda,
Where all the advanced people go.
One can imagine how well that went down
Among the embittered postwar French.
- is too wry and acidic.

But I suppose it depends on what you think poetry should do. I prefer implication; this passage has the opposite.

There are some parts, however, that really pull off an accusing subtlety. I felt this passage does that perfectly:

Hem, I want you to look at my prick.
Scott, tight, not quite drunk, dragged
his uneasy friend into the gurgling toilets.
Zelda says I'm too small, says I'm no good.
You're only small, says Hemingway,
because you are not aroused. Hey tiger!
I'm telling you, Scotty, pay no attention,
She's an emasculating bitch.
You can't say that. She's my wife, godammit!
Ah fuck it, Scott, pull up your trousers.


The indigence and depravity of the scene sets the mood perfectly. I think that is because the scene isn't narrated.

The last two stanza also get that mood of the first three. Especially the end refrain.

There are two tones in this. One is the subtle, lacerating satire of a careful narrator and implied decay; the other is reactionary, imposes and seems nothing more than a diatribe.

Sorry if that appears harsh.
Dave
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Fri May 25, 2007 3:29 am

Hi Dave,

An interesting and very thoughtful criticism! Looking at the poem again in the light of your comments I begin to get a bit of distance from ... well, the heat and clangour of composition, and the myopic closeness of the writer to his own flow of words! The whole long stanza about Hemingway could be excised, I suppose, although I rather like the bit about the shotgun at the end. I could also cut the comments about Zelda and Paris and the embittered French. I still need the Gatsby stanza, though, for it was the vulgarity of Gatsby's murkily acquired wealth that presaged his inevitable fall from grace and the fascination he held for Fitzgerald (for whom, I believe he was a fantasy alter ego). Tone is a problem, I admit, and I certainly don't want to engage in hectoring or shrill editorializing. But I do want to get some ideas across that are central to the poem ….

More later, after I take another long slow look at the piece. Thanks again for a most helpful commentary!

Cheers,
Brendan
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Fri May 25, 2007 10:03 pm

There is certainly poetic value in the delayed rhyme. Got that first time. Was encouraged to do so.

Should have added that in first crit.

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Fri May 25, 2007 10:47 pm

nother fantastic poem Dedalus. I particularly liked the way in which it was poetry, but followed an oral style. I can imagine somebody saying this as a long soliloquy on a stage, or a man saying it in a bar. I get an image of Tom Waits singing it in one of his songs, or preaching to his contemporaries over coffee and cigarettes.

Well done

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Sat May 26, 2007 11:34 am

I get an image of Tom Waits singing it in one of his songs, or preaching to his contemporaries over coffee and cigarettes
No higher praise. Humility don't come easy, but ... Jaysus!! 8)
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