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Sat Jun 04, 2005 4:23 pm

Too petite for anger,

my cold hands
grab porcelain ballerinas
and hurl them at the unforgiving glass.

In it’s shattered reflection,
I take in my surroundings
and suddenly despise the color pink.

I decided not to miss you, just become you.
Look where it has got me.


.tg.



This will be my last post on the forum. I owe any confidence I have in my writing to all of you. Thank you for your comments and encouragement. Goodbye.

Sarah
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Sat Jun 04, 2005 4:39 pm

MMMMMmmmmmmmmmm,

That is sad news.

I will certainly miss your poetry and your presence.

Not sure of your reasons, and I won't delve as you offered none, but whatever they are I hope things work out.

Be well
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Sat Jun 04, 2005 4:52 pm

That is a shame Sarah i also will miss your poetry and your help in the past in regards to some of my poetry,Shall never forget your kindness...
Take care and speed back soon as...Thomas... :(
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Sun Jun 05, 2005 12:01 pm

Taking camus' lead, wish you all the best and all that.

Read over my last comment to your poem about writers' block and realised I sounded very patronising when I said 'girlishness'. Sorry if I did, didn't mean to be at all.

Hope everything works out, you take care. If I ever read of a well-known American poet called Sarah somebody in the future, I'll wonder...

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Mon Jun 06, 2005 12:21 am

best wishes that girl, and good luck in life.


i for one really enjoyed her poems, and without meaning to sound too sucky-uppy , could a thread be organised to display some of her best work posted on the forum?

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Mon Jun 06, 2005 9:25 am

Hi Sarah

Very sad to hear that this will be your last poem on Poets' Graves. Your work has been of a consistently high standard and I'm sure there'll be a poetry book out there with your name on it someday.

If you change your mind, you know where we are.

Best wishes

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Thu Jun 09, 2005 6:49 am

Fare thee well.

What I would say isn't any more heart-warming than what has already been said, so I won't bother with it. Continue to email your poetry to me if you can and only if you'd like. I'd love to read it.

I'd call the poem itself (ahem, I'm assuming you want some critiques?) ominous, or "purposefully vague." I say that because, even though I know you, I have no idea what it's about. Talking to a mother? Father? Sister? Friend?

The lines are some of your best. I liked this among others:

"I decided not to miss you, just become you."

As you can see, all these fellows here will certainly miss you, me most definitely included.

Best wishes and if you stop writing after this encouragement from these forum poets, you're crazy.

- Caleb
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