Dark Was The Night

[mybelovedANAmosity]

Dark was the night in which I wandered
Darker still, the thoughts I pondered
Searching for solace in ebony gloom
The company I sought was shadow’s loom

Yet night could soothe only momentary
I fathomed all such good was temporary
Pilfering my sanctuary, the sun such a thief
Introducing once again all to soon my grief

Sleep eluding my frenzied mind
I walked with cooling dusk so kind
What to reach my ears so strained
A desperate cry surely pained

Close, nearby the sound had came
Once more a lament just the same
Moving a length my eyes beseeched
The blackened forest in which I reached

My gaze soon answered and I beheld
An imposing shadow with a prisoner jailed
Shrieked the last, a cadaver now lay
The shadow unaware, it’s attention at bay

I turned with fear acute inside
Every sense abruptly died
It seemed a nightmare through which I fell
Upon my lips was born a terrified wail

Turned I fled to escape the horror
Yet when I would be carried no more
I realized the sensation of material held
In my hand an object I did weld

Panic seized my heart ‘til it burst
For suddenly I understood the worst
A large and bloodied knife was in my grasp
It was I who committed the deadly task

---Kaitlin Jones

[Arcadian]

Hi Kaitlin,

You have some very good lines in this nice poem with sound poetical techniques- I particularly liked the assonance in the first stanza :

Darker still, the thoughts I pondered
Searching for solace in ebony gloom
The company I sought was shadow’s loom

predominance of the letter of the vowel 'o' as if to suggest an "oh" an exclamatory expression - nicely done


Nicholas

[mybelovedANAmosity]

Thanks for the comment. When I actually wrote this I didn't even noticed the predominance of the "o" sound in the first stanza. But I always read through my poems after writing them and I did notice the first of poem sounded particularly...strong I guess. Thanks again for the comment!
Kaitlin