Effects of cheese and religion.

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Wed Dec 08, 2004 2:54 am

You’re a cheese, you’re a cheese, you’re a cheese
streaming maniac, suffering from recurring dreams

of Jehovah’s Witness rucksacks, and of what they
may contain. Of Armageddon brochures, gilded

at the seams, of the end of the world scenarios
before you fail, before you succeed , before you

find your own bitter sweet end then concede,
with the arrogance of humility, of religion and of cheese.
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Wed Dec 08, 2004 6:04 pm

i like this a lot. im not sure i get it entirely though....can you offer any readers' support?
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Wed Dec 08, 2004 7:32 pm

well...........its probably about an over abundance of cheese and a fear of not reaching goals before the end is nigh, something on those lines.

I'm glad it gave you cause to comment, thanks.
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Wed Dec 08, 2004 7:42 pm

that's what i was hoping.... im with you on both counts
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Thu Dec 09, 2004 11:28 am

Camus very provocative

have you got something against religion and cheese ???? - LOL - how can you not like cheese : brie, camembert, cheddar, with water crackers , grapes , walnuts figs and a glass of wine ?


well i like cheese all the same :

and i dedicate these 2 stanzas to you - for your prollific efforts : bravo, bravise , bravissimo ! - you continaully surprise


A loaf with cheese

It creaked and moaned all night , a plaintive cry from the glen.
Next morning with a heavy axe the old tree was chopped down and the green
leaves removed to let the wind swirl and roam in my garden.

Mid-day sunrays streamed onto my table , a meal had been prepared;
blue-veined cheese sliced by a serrated knife, grapes, walnuts and
glass of red wine. A brown leaf fluttered through the window sill and
trembled beside my plate of bread crumbs from yesterday's baked loaf.

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Fri Dec 10, 2004 5:54 am

Arco,

LOL, I love cheese, although I think the old wives tale may be true, it causes nightmares, or vivid dreams anyway.

Re A loaf with cheese.

A beautiful still life, the Glen of Tranquility.
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