Autumn At Dog Rocks

[Arcadian]

removed for poetry contest submission

[Danté]

This reads fairly well, but fails to capture the juicy details in the footnotes.
The poem could relate to my back garden, I wanted more from this and think you could have a far better peice, if you focus on aspects that were inspiring and individual to that area.
Perhaps take out all the Autumn cliché stuff, and re-fill it with something tastier.

Hope this helps,

thanks

Danté