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Kirkland
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Sat Aug 27, 2005 11:03 am

I count the cracks along my street,
I count the cracks with my feet!
One. Two. Three. Ten.
Then I start all over again.

I count the cracks along my street,
I count the cracks with my feet!
One. Two. Three. Ten.
Then I start all over again.

I count the cracks along my street,
I count the cracks with my feet!
One. Two. Three. Ten.
Then I start all over again.
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Thomas
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Sat Aug 27, 2005 2:42 pm

Interesting piece,interesting piece,interesting piece...Sorry just my sense of repetitive humour...

The repetitive life who would want such an illness?Quite daunting i should imagine well potrayed piece......

Tom....
Imagination is more important than knowledge,knowledge is limited imagination encircles the world.
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Sun Aug 28, 2005 10:55 am

just a bad idea
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Mon Aug 29, 2005 10:22 am

Thank you for the compliment. Simplicity is beautiful I say.
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Mon Aug 29, 2005 4:11 pm

Sorry, but I fail to see the point of this other than a kind of one-dimensional joke, either in performance or on the page (I believe you're a performance poet?). I don't want to sound high-brow, but I think poetry should do more than this.
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Tue Aug 30, 2005 4:49 am

If you're up to a real challenge, you could try to put this theme in a villanelle?

:lol:
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 1:11 pm

What a great idea that is pseudonymous. An OCD villanelle would be perfect. Someone should do that.
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 9:39 pm

well, sure. Sylvia Plath already did Mad Girl's Love Song though...

welp, let's try it. It'd be fun to have a bunch of people try and write one, reward a bookmark again, that sort of thing.
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