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Wed Aug 24, 2005 7:34 pm

Average saloon,
smoke soaked souls and whiskey
worn washups. Slews of
no-rhythm tattoos dancing
drunkenly to their boots’ beat.
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Wed Aug 24, 2005 8:51 pm

cool.

It's Tanka Time.
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Thu Aug 25, 2005 10:46 am

Bombadil wrote:Average saloon,
smoke soaked souls and whiskey
worn washups. Slews of
no-rhythm tattoos dancing
drunkenly to their boots’ beat.
I like it. I always love good use of alliteration! Very sexy stuff.
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Fri Aug 26, 2005 11:37 pm

shucks. thanks.
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Sun Aug 28, 2005 11:01 am

ROCKS
Flawlessly
Do like this best:
"Slews of
no-rhythm tattoos dancing
drunkenly to their boots’ beat."
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Mon Aug 29, 2005 7:44 pm

1201,

This is a rare occasion, when I like my own stuff. I agree with you. I like it which, again is extremely odd.


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