The Perfect Couplet

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figure eight
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 11:14 am

I looked for our love in poetry,
But found only rhyme.
I searched for your touch in prose,
But found only words.

Maybe those who understand it,
And can put love on a page,
Are too busy being lovers,
To find the perfect couplet.

They know only love, not poetry,
Makes "me" rhyme with "you".
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 12:32 pm

Awesome!

I can say no more.

Thanks,

Seeks.
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 3:04 pm

clever, clever...romantic, bordering on the cheesy, but pulled back from the brink by the ingenious word play.
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Thu Sep 01, 2005 7:34 pm

I'd forgotten that earnest love poetry existed! Clever, succinct and completely without irony.

And interesting comment on the nature of writing poetry - when you're writing, you aren't living! One reason why I get absolutely fuck all writing done most of the time - I'm scared I'll be missing out and seek company instead.

Good to see love persists somewhere.

pb
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