Nightmare World

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Robert Davidson
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Fri Sep 02, 2005 11:31 am

'NIGHTMARE WORLD'

by Robert Davidson

Hanging on my wall beside my bed
Self-mutilation
Brings things into perspective

My hand broken from punching the wall
I hurt myself to ease the pain
So deep into my throbbing mind
I need to get it out

Tears of blood fall and shatter on my window
Like drops of glass from a distance
As a bus explodes
And nails my feelings to my door

Living in a dying world of bleeding souls
Terror bombs stalk my streets
I see my nightmares become reality

I see the future with a frightened eye
Raging fires everywhere, my walls closing in
Life is the nightmare world we're all dying to live


(This poem was written shortly after the London terrorist
attack on July 7 2005).
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Sat Sep 03, 2005 7:11 am

Hi Robert,

Very good poem and very poignant too.

Rach :D
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Sat Sep 03, 2005 8:53 am

Hi there Robert enjoyed this poem very emotional and powerfull nice to read a poem on here that has a meaning well done...

Tom..
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Sat Sep 03, 2005 1:14 pm

Some good bits Herr Davidson. Too melodramatic to be truly effective, though, I think. Ah, and welcome from Old Tom Bombadil.

Cheers.
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