Re-sound

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bernard
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Mon Mar 16, 2009 11:22 pm

Love,
whispered word:
a single hand-clap
echoing forever
through the canyon
of my days.
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Tue Mar 17, 2009 12:17 am

Hi bernard,

I can't tell if this is too cliche, it all seemed so familiar...

But what I do know is I found myself falling for it's simple charm. There's something about your turns of phrase in this one that sucked me in. It was a lot more emotive than I gave it credit for on first read.

Enjoyed, cheers.
Tom
meh and bah are wonderful words
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