Nightmare World

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Robert Davidson
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Thu Oct 13, 2005 11:34 am


'NIGHTMARE WORLD'

by Robert Davidson

Hanging on my wall beside my bed
Self-mutilation
Brings things into perspective

My hand broken from punching the wall
I hurt myself to ease the pain
So deep into my throbbing mind
I need to get it out

Tears of blood fall and shatter on my window
Like drops of glass from a distance
As a bus explodes
And nails my feelings to my door

Living in a dying world of bleeding souls
Terror bombs stalk my streets
I see my nightmares become reality

I see the future with a frightened eye
Raging fires everywhere, my walls closing in
Life is the nightmare world we're all dying to live


(This poem was written shortly after the London terrorist
attack on July 7 2005).
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 12:12 am

RD,

If your poems could match your articulate comments on Arcos' poems, man that would be great.
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 8:44 pm

Rob,

Haven't you posted this before, under a different title?

Hmmm. Maybe it's that they just all sound so much alike.

Dunno. Time to break away from the usual, I'd say.

Cheers,

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Fri Oct 14, 2005 8:51 pm

Haven't you posted this before, under a different title?
I thought it looked familiar, too:

viewtopic.php?p=6596&highlight=#6596

A crass, self-indulgent, and tragically unpoetic treatment of the July 7 bombings. We're all Londoners now, are we? Are we bollocks.
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:09 pm

fuck all, I was actually right.

wow.
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