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Wed Nov 02, 2005 11:42 pm

I said a while back that I would post something nice and cheesy from my way back when days, before I starting treating poetry as an art. This piece is 3 or 4 years old. It should be good for a few laughs.

O! to the chase
To the sweat and blood!
The grit of the hunt!
Would you be the same,
Had I not to hunt you?
No, says I.
Though shame beset me,
Though I pursue you unto my own end,
Though the world fall away,
It is the hunt that drives me.
I will chase you always,
Following your scent through the darkness.
Tracking you by lust alone when moonlight fails me,
And the musk of your sex is bathed by the stream.

By day, I will run near beside you
Close enough to caress your hair in the wind
Near enough to savor the passion of you skin
Only to be eluded!
Oh! you are pure swiftness!
How you dodge my pursuit I know not!
Slow your gait nymph!
That I may taste and touch
Not only smell and sense.
Slow! that I may drink you up—
Suck the sweat and lust from your breasts.
Fear no capture, nor death I pray.
For I must hunt you ever and anon,
Release you I would, whence you came.
And so hunt you again.
It is the hunt that drives me,
The chase that quells the fire in my loins,
Your essence that spurs me forward.
Madness take me!
For I cannot stop.
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Wed Nov 02, 2005 11:57 pm

real cute Bomb. A humorously, self deprecating post, although you must've spent a while doing this back whenever you wrote it, dont the pangs of nostalgia remind you of times when you quite liked this, afterall you did keep it.

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Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:06 am

Its a roller coaster of youth, a past we all aspire to? Does that make it less of an art? I think not. Invigorating. Should be called the rutting fields of america.

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Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:15 am

It should be called "painful to reread" for many reasons...I could barely get through it without rolling my eyes...

Ah, and Hello...it probably took me about 15 minutes. Most of them do, even now, max an half hour...

I kept it because of who I wrote it for not because I worked extra long on it, but now having read it, I may destroy it.
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Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:24 am

Too late. Its in the public realm where it should be.
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Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:26 am

That is cringe-inducing. Thanks for sharing, I think.
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Thu Nov 03, 2005 12:43 am

kj,

The cringe is the thing, indeed. I posted it for the mocking's sake, not to be lauded. Dunno, I thought it might offer a bit of perspective...also as I said, it's good for a few laughs.

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Thu Nov 03, 2005 10:36 pm

Brilliant!

I nominate...wait...ah too late.
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Fri Nov 04, 2005 12:45 pm

This must have been your neo-classical period, eh?

'madness take me!' - Like it!

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Sat Nov 05, 2005 1:11 pm

certinly can't go wrong with a bit of loin fire..... i love the way you use punctuation like an excited puppy dog. i can almost see your tongue hanging out.... when did you start calling yourself bombadil?
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Sat Nov 05, 2005 3:19 pm

Think you're in there mate.
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Sat Nov 05, 2005 5:54 pm

nice to meet you des
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Mon Nov 07, 2005 2:00 am

Ah. She's back! My fellow smut poster from the other side of the world. So good to see you in the lists again, desi.

Much has happened, besides the name change, which was just as much out of boredom as it was anything else.

Indeed the puppy dog does seem to suit, doesn't it?

I can't tell you how happy I am you're back. We seem to be suffering an influx of testerone lately. A little extra estrogen will do us all well.

What have you been up to?

Cheers,

Keith

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Wed Nov 09, 2005 12:01 am

well it's nice to feel welcome! ive just been busy working and touring and writing songs so i sort of had my creative outlets covered for a while. and truthfully my muse just left me for a bit....that hurt. so im on my own now and a bit rusty but ive got a healthy dose of oestrogen coming up for you if you can hang on.....what's been going on with you?
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Wed Nov 09, 2005 4:29 am

Bring on the estrogen. Glad to have you back, whatever the spark. In my life...?

I am recovering from shoulder surgery, therapy is a bore and painful to boot. Better news: my wife and I are going to have our third child in March. Exciting stuff. Otherwise just pathos. But then, it wouldn't feel right.

You've been busy. Touring, even? Do expound.

Cheers.
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Thu Nov 10, 2005 12:59 am

touring theatre....if it sounds glamorous it's really not. at least not in this country. am just about to head off again to do panto( a great british tradition i couldnt really explain the appeal of). having children now that's impressive. especially a third! well done. if that's what you say. i too have undergone therapy and it sucks. but i believe the discipline it requires can help to focus your mind for other things. like writing.
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