Red Lion Inn, Dunchurch - 5th November 1605

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Thu Nov 27, 2008 5:03 pm

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Lake wrote:Is the word 'guy' originated from Guy Fawkes?
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Guy - "fellow," 1847, originally Amer.Eng.; earlier (1836) "grotesquely or poorly dressed person," originally (1806) "effigy of Guy Fawkes," leader of the Gunpowder Plot to blow up British king and Parliament (Nov. 5, 1605), paraded through the streets by children on the anniversary of the conspiracy. The male proper name is from Fr., related to It. Guido, lit. "leader," of Gmc. origin.
bobvincent wrote:The evocative images show your talent, Barrie. You should apply it to something more important in your own life , which is relevant to other people's experience of life,
- Thanks Bob - So that's where I've been going wrong for 59 years - I'll give it a try.

Cheers everyone.

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After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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Thu Nov 27, 2008 5:11 pm

I've just read this and liked it very much. It's kind of hard to avoid using the same types of metaphors in literature because you have to force yourself not to be influenced by other writers, especially on a historical topic like this, but I think you've managed to avoid any over-used one's and still write a great poem.

I loved the "ale stained table tops", very atmospheric, and just overall a lovely read, so thanks Barrie :)

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Thu Nov 27, 2008 6:45 pm

Thanks for commenting, Raisin - glad you enjoyed it.

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After letting go of branches and walking through the ape gait, we managed to grasp what hands were really for......
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