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Interpretation: A Fragment
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 1:03 pm
by TarkovskyMirror
And all the while she took that shimm'ring vial:
Decent upon great ballrooms perfumes, while
There was I, perplexed and hurting so,
Embarked upon great journeys through the snow
Falling unto throws of white desire,
Composed beyond the breath of earthly fire,
To pain me so and soar amidst the stars;
Those spirit-guzzling, shimmering, peopled bars.
An anthem for doomed modernity plays
Where every topt woman, drunken, lays.
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 6:35 pm
by cameron
Hi Tark
Sorry but I'm afraid this is horrible. Abstract, archaic and full of predictable rhymes. It also contains elision which died out as a poetic technique over 100 years ago. It's not even an example of regular meter.
Cheers
Cam
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 8:51 pm
by Virago
The poem does seem a wee bit dated. Not that there's anything wrong in that, I'm sure it had its devotees but I prefer more modern poetry. Tried your web page but it doesn't seem to work. Have you tried your hand at more modern stuff?
Off to look up "elision". It rings a bell, I'm thinking of a phrase I think I've heard before, 'elision fields' but probably should have googled before posting
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:30 pm
by Bombadil
those would be the Elysian Fields...
if you've some good headache medicine, find my poem "The Elysian Nomad" about 15 or 20 pages back. you may suffer, but hey, that's what drugs are for.
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:38 pm
by Virago
can't you just post it here?
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:41 pm
by pseud
what's the fun in that....?
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 10:43 pm
by Virago
I'm a lazy so and so (in ADDITION to my other fine qualities)- anyway, I wish you bards a good night, I'm going to bed with a horlicks and Jasper Fforde- bonsoiree!
Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 11:38 pm
by Bombadil
wahl....
its here on top again, though I doubt people will enjoy it...