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semi-permanent

Me 'n my rig,
semi-permanent.
Got all 18 wheels down
full load, full on
'til another back-up on the beltway
slows me to a dead stop.

Idling, clickin’ through stations,
so tired of hearin' diesel driven songs
from lily ass boys
that never sat a 12 hours
running down state borders
check, check, check

No this ain't romantic
runnin’ lonely round the inner loop
then again, it ain't really the blues either.

She appears first in my side view.
Another VW vixon with her finger on the trigger
down the elastic of her skirt
and I got myself a semi-permanent
half a hard-on
'n half a mind to ride her side
outta my way all the way North
just to cross the finish line
by my six cylinder baby's side.

I like the language. Good use. I'd like to have you explain the last stanza a bit more detailedly, though.

Cheers.

yee-haw
this 'ol lily assed boy wants to take up guitar again
sing back up, cowgirl

JVB,

this is a surprise-- LOL- a woman wrote this ??? - perhaps your website should be called something else altogether rather mannequin envy !

A fleeting day dream romance on State patrolled roads ? - I noted the phallic symbols rigs, load, cyclinder etc - it does not have any indication of romance with the poetic objects chosen and talked about , more of a one night stand, conquest feel about it ...so I

found the 3rd stanza a little weak or perhaps incongruous ( the words romance, blues )

No this ain't romantic
runnin’ lonely round the inner loop
then again, it ain't really the blues either.

otherwise a fun piece

cheers
Arco

Bombadil- thanks for the read and the comment! I could expand upon the last stanza, but I am not sure if it would be acceptable in this forum...



1201- saddle up old boy


Arcadian- Thanks for the suggestions on stanza 3, I will definately take a closer look. I wonder why surprised that a woman wrote this. Because of the harsh sexual topic? The voice? The phallus here and there and everywhere?

Ah and I do not have penis envy I think that having one to carry around would be a bit burdensome, all the rearranging...

I have to get my raunchy poetry out every now and again.

Thanks for the comments and humor fun reply.

Happy Weekend! I am off for the country!

Jennifer

Being, for whatever reason, the local authority on erotic poetry as well as pushing the few limits of acceptable content...I say post away. I should like to see what kind of raunch and romance you bring with you. Those who wish to will read it.

Cheers,

K