Plow maid

[Bombadil]

Suitably provincial—Tuscan
country girl—not enough to
be trite.

A high chin, supple hands
slim ankles and patrician
gaze.

Proud—worthy of
domination—but not
breakable.

Prim and proper,
but not puritanical…

Dirty enough to do
doggy style in the sawdust:
chaste enough to come back
to next week on my way through.

[unchained soul]

Keith,

Very good.

Rach

[Bombadil]

Thanks.

I had no idea how to execute the thing. Wrestled with it for like 5 or 10 minutes before I got any direction...

Cheers,

Keith

[moniquejade]

hmm, different than things I might have read, I like the style.. what was the inspiration?

[Bombadil]

boredom.

[moniquejade]

[dillingworth]

I had no idea how to execute the thing. Wrestled with it for like 5 or 10 minutes before I got any direction...

5 or 10 minutes? My god, you're one lucky man if that defines "wrestling"! It's not uncommon for me to spend up to 4 hours just writing a first draft!

Sorry for that outburst, I suffer occasionally from artistic (and other kinds of) frustration.

[Bombadil]

I suppose you weren't here when first we addressed this, if I can't get at least the basic idea out and functioning in twenty minutes I can it and move on. Usually it just comes out.

I hope that didn't sound pompous...

-Keith

[dillingworth]

not at all - if anything i envy your ability to to that. i guess different things work for different people - i myself have ideas for a poem so seldom i hate to give up on one!

[camus]

Nice one.

I much prefer your descriptive poetry.

The "Vulgarity" also used it's place well.

I've been pondering what makes a poem attractive to me:

My conclusion - Clever phrasing, exciting words. I know it may seem a simple answer, but one I'm glad I found. In the case of this poem:

"Suitably provincial", "trite", "patrician gaze" "chaste enough"

cheers
Kris

[pseud]

I've gone the other way, camus, just stopped analysing it so much. When you see a good poem, you just know and there's no questioning it. "Why" stopped bothering me a while ago...

[camus]

Pseud,

Indeed you were I believe "Over analytical" lol.

There are though certain critieria that make a good poem.

"You just know" is a wee bit of a copout, I think so anyway.

I applaud your mellowing.

[Macavity]

'patrician' and 'doggy style' ~ nicely soiled


cheers

mac

[pseud]

ha yes Kris it seems I drift to the extremes on this issue.

[Bombadil]

Kris,

I thought they were all descriptive...

-K.

[camus]

"I much prefer your descriptive poetry."

I'll have to ponder that one. More than likely grasping for words that didn't appear, so I put "Descriptive"

It's so frustrating being ...............mmmmmmmmmm whats the opposite of articulate..............inarticulate, lol. Shit man.

Ok take your poem "A thing or two"

To me that concentrates more on a theme, would you call "ego-stroke notes" a description? I'd say more an allusion. Whereas:

"A high chin, supple hands
slim ankles and patrician
gaze. "

Is a definite description.

What say you?

I guess I'm saying I'm not a fan of symbolism..........maybe.

[Arcadian]

No Keith ,

You don't sound pompous

You are right though - if there is no inkling or suggestion of direction
or emergence of a major theme to work with ( Alexander Pope said this too..)

I usually stop too after 15 minutes and leave it - I guess you just have to be receptive when the muse calls , and when she does have paper and pen handy - I usually dont know what themes I will write about or when , when it happens it happens - I tried once writing regularly and I could not even pen down one stanza - so i gave up this approach

Arco