I Wonder - Revised

[unchained soul]

What’s it like being you? I’ve only ever been me.
Though transmogrification whispers my name,
I’ve yet to answer: I’m often lost for words.

I want to walk into your experiences,
have a good look around; examine the differences.
Consider the world from your perspective.

I itch to dance in your happy memories;
sit quietly and learn in your sad times.
Creep into your brain and think just like you.

What’s it like seeing through your eyes? I’ve only seen using mine.
Is the sky still blue, the grass the same green?
Maybe things are different in your universe.

Do your ears comprehend as mine do? I wouldn’t know.
If they do I don’t understand one iota;
your taste in heavy metal music.

[Yesterday]

this subject of being someone else seems to be very popular, i supose trying to understand someone else would be the reason, i was looking back through the forum and found quite a few, i've writen one also - previously posted- and i was sort of trying to get the same idea;

[quote]I want to walk into your experiences,
have a good look around; examine the differences.
Consider the world from your perspective.
[/quote]

i especaily love this bit

[unchained soul]

Hi Seeks,

Thanks. I'm going to have to go and have a look now. I didnt realise the same subject had been covered already. Haha.

Rach

[seeksthebalance]

Hey Rach,

Love your choice of subject here, it's one that intrigues me. I hadn't ever thought to write about it though.

Brave of you to use 'Transmogrification'. Such a long word in such a short poem, but you pulled it off nicely.

I wonder if there is any more you could add to this. You've exposed the subject nicely I'd like to see you exploring it further.

Seeks.

[unchained soul]

Hi Seeks,

Thanks yeah there is plenty of room for extending this poem. I may just do that.

Rach

[Yesterday]

don't wrry bout the poem being covered, their heaps of differant ways of writing it, have fun with this one!

**Yesterday**

[unchained soul]

Hi Yesterday,

Thanks. Just revised it.

Rach

[cameron]

Hi Rach.

Check out If, My Darling by Larkin which is very similar in approach to your poem. It begins:

If my darling were once to decide
Not to stop at my eyes,
But to jump, like Alice, with floating skirt into my head,

Larkin's poem is full of specific examples about the inside of his head. To me, your poem lacks such examples. Good topic though.

Cam

[unchained soul]

Hi Cam,

Thanks I'll have a look.

Rach