the lover

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Aryys
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Wed Sep 21, 2005 7:30 pm

yes there was a muse for this perticular piece, and she truly is the most beautiful woman i have ever beheld

enjoy!

her beauty took my breath away
she woke me with her smile
a kiss like i had never felt
it lingered for a while
she ran her fingers through my hair
continued down my spine
brought them up my back again
and told me she was mine
i lusted for our lips to touch
again, as just before
i took her in a warm embrace
whispered i want more
the kiss again, longer now
my heart it skipped a beat
she stroked my face, and looked at me
and now i felt complete
"Reality is a myth, albeit a very persistant one"
lotzandlotzandlotz
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Wed Sep 21, 2005 8:44 pm

hiya, thanks for the reply on my poems really helped.
im sorry but i love this one... im a sucker for the romantic kinda passionate stuff!
:D
Aryys
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Wed Sep 21, 2005 9:45 pm

thanks lotz

sorry i didn't give you a longer review but i like your style and i'm glad u liked my romantic efforts :D
"Reality is a myth, albeit a very persistant one"
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Wed Sep 21, 2005 10:08 pm

very sensual, very based in the real. The first line seems weak only because so many have used it before; the rest is pretty good for what it was trying to accomplish though.

If I haven't said this to you before, welcome.

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Thu Sep 22, 2005 7:05 pm

I don't think I've said it yet, so:

Welcome from the weirdest.

Keep posting.
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Fri Sep 23, 2005 3:36 pm

This poem took me places, nice places. I liked it more and more as I read down the poem and if left me with a little smile. I understand your writing.
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