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THE PRINCESS IN A SEA-GIRT TOWER

by Robert Davidson.

A princess stood in a sea-girt tower
With face innocent, moon-pale and fair,
A sly smile kindled brightly in her eyes
As she gave me look for look so rare.

Sleeping Beauty awaits the husband kiss,
Such sensual thoughts in my mind so ran
As I stood on the wharf, rapt by longing.
She's so hungering for her conquering man.

I took a flashlight photograph of her
Silhouetted against the bright sky-line,
As she posed nude one night on a sand-bar
Just off the shore, and so I thought her mine.

But fate's despot thumb was downward turned
And I knew my lustful days were done.
The ship with her real lover now returned
And I knew she'd played with me for fun.

It has been oh, so long since life was love
And as the grey years pass, I'm just struck dumb.
It seems that I was too enthralled of her
But then, the hearts of older men are numb.
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I am afraid I am not a very good critic but I have to comment. I enjoyed reading your poem. I sing them out these days and take more joy from them than ever. Thank you.

Hey Robert,

A fellow Melbournian I see - welcome, you need to observe the rules:

You have posted 6 poems to date but we have seen no critiques

The rules of this forum state for constructive criticism for every poem you post

There are no free loaders or free lunches in here:

Just hard work crafting and reviewing poetry - do you wish to be part of this forum ? to take advantage from talented writers in here to provide you with constructive feedback if they have an opinion to express ?

if so then you owe 6 critiques to other members poems now before posting anymore of your poems

be fair .. go on pick up that pen

Arco