Awoken by glass clatter, I hear
milk float electric whirr, his
bottles rattle in their baskets,
as milkman delivers the clink.
"Fetch milk in", mam sharts.
Open our snowed door to find
Blue Tom Tit has been at it
again, claws stood on the lip,
beak strips the silver foil top
for a sup and winter sip,
and not made milksop, I spit
"Tit's been at cream again, mam!"[
Tom Tit
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Enjoyed, Paul.
PaulSteveLaurence wrote:Awoken by glass clatter, I hear
Milk Float electric whirr, his - do you need capitals?
bottles rattle in their baskets,
as milkman delivers the clink. - clink just means the sound? Not local dialect?
"Fetch milk in", mam sharts.
Open our snowed door to find - I like snowed door
Blue Tom Tit has been at it
again, claws stood on the lip,
beak strips the silver foil top - stripped?
for a sup and winter sip,
and not made milksop, I spit - not made milksop, I like that, if I understand correctly - showing spirit?
"Tit's been at cream again, mam!"[
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
I contemplate such bitter stuff.
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Glad you enjoyed it, Ray.ray miller wrote:Enjoyed, Paul.
PaulSteveLaurence wrote:Awoken by glass clatter, I hear
Milk Float electric whirr, his - do you need capitals?
bottles rattle in their baskets,
as milkman delivers the clink. - clink just means the sound? Not local dialect?
"Fetch milk in", mam sharts.
Open our snowed door to find - I like snowed door
Blue Tom Tit has been at it
again, claws stood on the lip,
beak strips the silver foil top - stripped?
for a sup and winter sip,
and not made milksop, I spit - not made milksop, I like that, if I understand correctly - showing spirit?
"Tit's been at cream again, mam!"[
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Glad you enjoyed it, Ray. Yes, you understand correctly, Ray. Thankyou. Yes, it is "strips" as in present tense. Edited with some of your other comments.ray miller wrote:Enjoyed, Paul.
PaulSteveLaurence wrote:Awoken by glass clatter, I hear
Milk Float electric whirr, his - do you need capitals?
bottles rattle in their baskets,
as milkman delivers the clink. - clink just means the sound? Not local dialect?
"Fetch milk in", mam sharts.
Open our snowed door to find - I like snowed door
Blue Tom Tit has been at it
again, claws stood on the lip,
beak strips the silver foil top - stripped?
for a sup and winter sip,
and not made milksop, I spit - not made milksop, I like that, if I understand correctly - showing spirit?
"Tit's been at cream again, mam!"[