Poetry Forum

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What are you up to here, Ray? Felt I had to post a reply 'cause I hate to see things on the site that someone has toiled over and received no feed-back - also was intrigued by your motives.
The White House ref is now way out-of-date. Any particular reason to emphasise the Jewish connection?
There must be other comparisons you could make to project the inequalities of the peasants; I expect their aspirations are other than wasting good cigars on unsuitable recipients.
Reckon that unlike Monica, you had your tongue in your cheek!!
Best wishes, Leslie.

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I guess if you wrote it back then that context is fine.

But yeah, probably newer ways now to speak the same truth.

Fine with me tho.

Stu

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I only half thought that, I could see your purpose for the larger cause. Just keeping an eye on the offence-ometer, (not that I'm offended), what with those cartoons knocking around.

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The global community seems so tense at the moment. Prone to be pissed off over something as trivial as a cartoon.

Huh.

Ray,

I don't like it. It doesn't show me anything, nor does it bring anything new to the table. I agree with Leslie, surely there is a better way to communicate the difference between the have-nots and the well-cigared.

Cheers,

Keith

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Ray,

I'm afraid I agree with Bombadil - this one doesn't do anything for me. I've seen some of your other writing and I think you could pull off something a lot more subtle/crafted to make the same point in a more effective way.

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