Our Midnight Mahatma

[lotus]

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[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi Lotus.
Well, that's a tricksy one isn't it?
'Mere' seems terribly judgemental (for some reason) and I feel obliged to very keep a close and beady eye on 'midnight.' Colour me suspicious.
I don't think the second verse is that satisfying, as if it is missing another element (a conclusion of some sort). But an enjoyable read/challenge as always.

Regards, Not.


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[lotus]

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Hi Lotus.
Well, that's a tricksy one isn't it?
'Mere' seems terribly judgemental (for some reason) and I feel obliged to very keep a close and beady eye on 'midnight.' Colour me suspicious.
I don't think the second verse is that satisfying, as if it is missing another element (a conclusion of some sort). But an enjoyable read/challenge as always.

Regards, Not.


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dear Not

thankyuuu for pointing to judgemental
as it does speak to 'comparisons'

i see your point of wanting more in the 2nd stanza
yet so often situations in life are but observations
and each of us is left to our own discernment
and questioning

an opportunity to expand our vision
to see and understand how others view things

perhaps at times conclusions should be but open ended investigations

a warm smile
silent lotus

[Macavity]

Hi Lotus,

The title rather weighted me to an historical figure rather than its general meaning. I enjoyed the juxtapositions more without that constraint. Loved the park benches/epilogues combination/comparison.

best

mac

[Firebird]

Hi Lotus,

I too really like the second stanza too. I have to say that the ‘mere’ stood out for me too, but not in a negative way. I like the constraint. The more I think about that first stanza and the ‘comparison‘ the better it gets.

It’s a compelling poem.

Cheers,

Tristan