The Diary of a Misanthrope

[the stranger]

Arise much later than the sun
despise everyone
go to bed after the moon
and so on…

[Amadis]

Oh, and remember to glare, disparagingly, at others on the train....

I really like this one.
Short, sharp, to the point.
It works.

[ray miller]

Very droll. Shouldn't it be past tense, though, a diary entry?

[jcnash]

Works for me, I like the brevity and it's a nice use of half rhymes.

At first I felt I wanted a couple more syllables on the last line but I was wrong, that truncation is much better. Does it offer a sense of despair at the person's own condition, or is that just transference on my part?

Thanks,
nash.

[Firebird]

Very good, but I agree with Ray about the past tense.

Cheers,

Tristan

[camus]

Thanks guys, just a tentative step into writing poems again.

Cheers
Kris