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the stranger
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Sat Jan 20, 2024 1:09 am

You tap at the door, fingernails
of ruddy iron. Sleet your chorus

rattling the taut leafed glass.
A bear outline, thickset in wool.

Irish hair for sure, sprung black.
Night falls as I drop the latch,

You darken my life, with your
magick smile and lucky heather.
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Sat Jan 20, 2024 1:45 am

Hi Stranger


I could chisel it over my timber hut in the woods to ward off bears and evil spirits :D

Tony
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

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Sat Jan 20, 2024 2:18 am

I could chisel it over my timber hut in the woods to ward off bears and evil spirits
Hey, a poem of some actual use! Please do. Send me a photo.

Cheers
Ts
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Sat Jan 20, 2024 2:52 am

I meant that in a good way, by the way. It's a great poem.

Tony
Counting the beats,
Counting the slow heart beats,
The bleeding to death of time in slow heart beats,
Wakeful they lie.

Robert Graves
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Sat Jan 20, 2024 2:59 am

I meant that in a good way, by the way. It's a great poem.
Yeah, no worries, taken in the way it was intended and thanks.
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Sat Jan 20, 2024 5:31 am

My favorite line: "Night falls as I drop the latch." I like the ending too.

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Fri Feb 02, 2024 10:16 pm

My favorite line: "Night falls as I drop the latch." I like the ending too.
Thanks John, sorry for the late reply!
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