Random Bloke
“The ravings of a madman.” You will find
these often written by some random bloke
who’s never tried to sever his right hand.
That’s only natural; I won’t attack
folks on their tours, but I will say “the mind
is its own place.” For those who have been back
in the brain’s lumber-room, you understand
perhaps my feeling. There’s a certain lack
of reference for us. I won’t pretend
to speak for all since we are not alike.
I speak for me, and that is where I end.
Random Bloke
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CalebPerry
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This is definitely a clear poem, John. I like to read poems that I don't have to struggle to understand. I agree with Tony that the lumber room image is a good one.
That incident in which you almost [did that horrible thing to yourself -- I don't even like to say it] obviously left an impact on you because you mention it often in your writing.
That incident in which you almost [did that horrible thing to yourself -- I don't even like to say it] obviously left an impact on you because you mention it often in your writing.
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If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
If you don't like the black theme, it is easy to switch to a lighter color. Just ask me how.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.
Hi Tony, hi Caleb,
Tony, I'm glad you enjoyed that line.
Caleb, I'm glad you liked the poem. I write as clearly as i can, and sometimes that is clearer than at other times. We all do what we can, I think. Yup, the incident you mention stayed with me.
Cheers,
John
Tony, I'm glad you enjoyed that line.
Caleb, I'm glad you liked the poem. I write as clearly as i can, and sometimes that is clearer than at other times. We all do what we can, I think. Yup, the incident you mention stayed with me.
Cheers,
John
