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I used to bend my head
towards on-coming trains
pressing
my ear on the steel tracks
listening
with glee and fear
the metallic
hiss from miles away

putting a ten pence piece on the rail

the coins that were flattened
seemed like the coins of kindness.

to the metallic?

An unexpected ending! Nice image as well, the N's former self bending over the rails.

Cheers,
John

Thanks John

The insane things you get up to when you were a kid? Or was it just me?

You consistently deliver Tony. The first eight lines I found particularly evocative.

I like this! I definitely like it! So much subtlety and implied meaning!

I know what you mean. I used to jump from rooftop to rooftop, forty feet up, when I was ten. Glad not to be doing that now.

Cheers,
John

Thanks Mac, Caleb , glad you liked it.
Good job you weren't a teenager today John, you might have been jumping rooftops with a self-stick and phone in hand

Tony